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在精英中学或者OC测试的英文写作给分，按首要水平，能够根据一下程序：
1. Relevance to the subject – No more, no less to the requirements or major points
2. Paragraph Structure -- Are major points well structured and organized to support the whole subject?
3. Sentence Structure -- Smooth and understandable?
4. Vocabulary -- Accurate usage/conveyance
5. Gra妹妹ar/Punctuation/Spelling – Obvious mistakes？
为便利了解（中文）
1. 主题相干性 -- 未几不少按要求写出主题/核心思想。
2. 段落构造 -- 要点是不是组织明晰？有没有重复凌乱？
3. 句子构造 -- 流畅仍是艰涩难懂？
4. 辞汇 -- 是不是精确表白思想
5. 语法/标点/拼写 – 是不是有显著的过错？
其实，就精英中学考试来讲，写作占英文的1/3比重，这样假如按300分的总分，那末写作的总分数差未几在35摆布（综合斟酌了学校给分和考试分数）。
目前，我的看法是，得多人（先生，家长和少数补习教师）将写作和浏览的训练形式混杂起来，不足针对性。好比，写作对辞汇的要求是第四位，其实不要求先生用太多繁杂难懂的单词（而浏览和GA就要求有得多的辞汇量），表白分明精确更加首要。最次要的是主题相干性以及要点的组织构造，教师给分的时分根本按下面因素来斟酌的。
因为主题相干性和段落要点十分首要，也被得多人无视，当初就来看看一个案例。
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先生案例一：
My Special Day
Write a story about your special day. Tell and explain about three activities or events you did on that day.
Your writing will be judged:
What you have to say
How well you organize the way you write it
How clearly and effectively you express yourself.
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注：这个先生是Year 5 的OC班先生。
Today I went to the school carnival. As I started to slowly walk into the bus, I chattered to my best friends behind me.
For minutes, we waited in the bus and talked to the excited classmates around us. Even I was so excited that I couldn’t wait for several minutes.
As soon as the bus stopped, we were instructed to quietly walk out and line up near the picnic area.
As I walked past the kind, bus driver, I thanked him politely while the others walked noisily past me. The kind-hearted teacher on duty encouraged me and I felt so pleased with myself.
Our class set up the mats at our house groups, and happily started playing card games.
As the fist event took place, many of the kindergarten children rushed up to the waiting area.
The event was organised by age groups from youngest to oldest.
Finally, the shot put was called. I made it into the finals and I excitedly dashed up to the shot –put area.
I scored five pint six metres and was extremely happly with the results.
As I finished the running events, I felt my heart beat quickly when I came first.
After the events, I went to the public canteen and bought sweets.
After five hours of extreme fun, it was time to g back to school.
I hoped that next year, we could have another exciting carnival..
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点评：
相干性：
主题是， three activities or events on a special day, 然而，从这篇文章中你无奈分明的看到三个主题。从“For minutes, we waited in the bus and talked to the excited classmates around us” 。。。 up to . “The event was organised by age groups from youngest to oldest.”一大段没有须要，根本上能够去掉，放在那里，哪怕写的再好，也不会得甚么分的。真实的activity 好象是从As the first event took placed 开始，从那当前，shot up and running, 以及后面的playing card games， 是否three activities之一呢? 十分不分明。
段落构造：
从这个文章中，段落也是很凌乱，读者无奈分明地看到要点组织。Introduction, body parts and conclusion/wrap up， 组织凌乱，一句成为了一个段落。
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顺便也点评一下这个帖子里的一篇文章（因不知道残缺内容和写作要求，可能有失偏颇）。
Shiver 1
My garden is no ordinary garden. It smells like an ordinary garden with floating fragrances of flowers and compost bins. My lounge is bright; my bedroom is light. But… my garden is no ordinary garden. In fact, my garden is spooky and cooky, shivering and quivering and savagely scary. It is in that spooky, cooky, shivering, quivering, savagely dark garden that extremely extraordinary things happen. The most extremely extraordinary thing that ever happens in my garden is… when my great grandfather’s treasure chest is opened!
点评：
优点 -- 这篇文章里的单词对比丰硕，觉得高于小学程度，每个句子构造不错，神韵教强。
缺陷 – 过于反复。相干单词沉积过量，多是过分强调rhythm而至（我不知道是否写诗？）。好比，spooky, cooky是相似的，shivering, quivering也是相似的，most extremely extraordinary thing， 也是夸大的沉积。my garden is no ordinary garden也是反复。写这个次要是为了让教师评神韵单词分吗？而下面我提过，辞汇只是写作给分的第四位因素。
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其实，写作也是交流的一种伎俩，而且在英语中是最难的，由于第一：要有本人的观念；第二：要公道组织本人的观念。终究的目的是要他人能从作者那里失掉有用的信息，而不是简略的单词摆列了。写作也是在今后的糊口和任务中最能够显示实力的技巧，老外很能说，然而绝大少数人写的很差。有句谚语：
“Reading maketh a full man, conference a ready man, writing an exact man”, by Roger Beacon. 充沛阐明这一点。
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